Honey

I’ve known where he goes. How could his longing be a secret? Especially when I see the hunger in his eyes when someone says your name. At last he understands how his desire can be his ruin. Yet that knowledge means nothing when his mouth desires only to be filled by you.
  
I can only watch
his delight in licking lips
still sticky from you.

Song Choice: Jolene by Dolly Parton

This poem was inspired by a prompt at Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads: Love Hurts. It's also linked up to Poets United Poetry Pantry 391
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56 comments:

  1. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 15, 2018 at 3:06 PM

    Agh! The closing lines! You capture the betrayal so perfectly in these short lines. I LOVE the responses to your prompt. Such good ones!

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    1. RommyFebruary 15, 2018 at 3:21 PM

      Thanks Sherry! I wasn't sure I could pull off a poem with this theme, but I am happy with the results.

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2018 at 3:44 PM

    Dolly' s version has none of the impact you gave - sensational!

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    1. RommyFebruary 15, 2018 at 5:05 PM

      Aw! I think Dolly's amazing, so this is really sweet.

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  3. Maude LynnFebruary 15, 2018 at 3:45 PM

    Wow! This is really intense. Well done!

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    1. RommyFebruary 15, 2018 at 5:06 PM

      Thanks Mama Zen. It's not my usual style so I'm glad I was able to execute this in a satisfactory way.

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  4. Debra She Who SeeksFebruary 15, 2018 at 4:25 PM

    Is this poem about Winnie the Pooh?

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    1. RommyFebruary 15, 2018 at 5:08 PM

      Bwahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!

      OMG, just when I got done laughing, I imagined the poem as if it were being read by Rabbit and cracked up again.

      *wipes eyes* That's hysterical. Even when I'm trying to be gloomy I evoke ghosts of childhood stories. I'm going to have to work harder next time.

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  5. FireblossomFebruary 15, 2018 at 7:43 PM

    Damn that Jolene anyway. Tail shaker home breaker.

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  6. JimFebruary 15, 2018 at 8:23 PM

    Nice write. It is sad, as your writer laments, "I can only watcH ..." Bolder women in Texas have done some very malicious things to their men when they stray.
    Google "Bobbitt's revenge Texas"
    ..

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  7. Kim M. RussellFebruary 16, 2018 at 3:35 AM

    This is so good, Rommy, especially the way you directly address the other woman as 'Honey' and then extend the metaphor. Great choice of song, too.

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  8. brudbergFebruary 16, 2018 at 3:24 PM

    Not just losing a lover but a friend also (at least that is what I read)... the stickiness of the lips is so well done.

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    1. RommyFebruary 17, 2018 at 7:10 PM

      I hadn't intended it when I wrote it - but yes I can see that now. Cool!

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  9. MargaretFebruary 16, 2018 at 4:35 PM

    Ah... that knowing she isn't really gone -

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  10. tonispencerFebruary 16, 2018 at 5:05 PM

    I told my husband of he ever did this to me, he'd disappear and the pieces would never be found.

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    1. RommyFebruary 17, 2018 at 7:11 PM

      *snicker-snort* There are plenty of places in Philly and the surrounding 'burbs to scatter a body.

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  11. HelenFebruary 16, 2018 at 5:27 PM

    I am left wondering just what in the Hell you have planned! Love this!!

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  12. Sharon RawsonFebruary 16, 2018 at 6:43 PM

    Yes, now write the revenge poem! He deserves everything you throw at him!

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  13. kaykualaFebruary 16, 2018 at 7:46 PM

    I can only watch
    his delight in licking lips
    still sticky from you.

    Reflects very much the mood as suggested by the prompt, Rommy! Nice to relate it to a great singer.

    Hank

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  14. Gillena CoxFebruary 17, 2018 at 1:07 AM

    Nice haibun; short and [sweet?]

    much love...

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    1. RommyFebruary 17, 2018 at 7:12 PM

      LOL, sweet with a load of bitter served up inside.

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  15. Kerry O'ConnorFebruary 17, 2018 at 5:49 AM

    Sometimes there is no cure but the bad after taste years down the line.

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    1. RommyFebruary 17, 2018 at 7:13 PM

      Yes, sadness like that lingers for a long time.

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  16. Gillena CoxFebruary 18, 2018 at 7:37 AM

    Happy Sunday Rommy

    much love...

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  17. Sanaa RizviFebruary 18, 2018 at 8:01 AM

    Ouch! It's hard to recover when we realize the person we loved most has fallen prey to another's charm. Powerfully penned, Rommy!💞

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  18. Donna@LivingFromHappinessFebruary 18, 2018 at 9:10 AM

    That is a deep hurt beautifully crafted in this haibun!

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  19. colleen LooseleafnotesFebruary 18, 2018 at 11:11 AM

    Sticky is so sexy!

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  20. MaryFebruary 18, 2018 at 3:50 PM

    Really one's unfaithfulness is often NOT a secret. The eyes and the licking lips often tell the tale!

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    1. RommyFebruary 19, 2018 at 6:52 AM

      Yeah, usually there are signs something shady is going down.

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  21. Old EggFebruary 18, 2018 at 5:08 PM

    It is good to vent ones feelings now and then. Your graphic word picture spared us no sad detail, and the narrators sadness and anger was quite apparent.

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  22. ZQFebruary 18, 2018 at 7:50 PM

    Well, you covered the prompt very well. Nice!
    ZQ

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  23. Wendy BourkeFebruary 18, 2018 at 8:41 PM

    You have captured the age old paradigm of passion and betrayal brilliantly, here - and capped it with the perfect title: Honey.

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    1. RommyFebruary 19, 2018 at 10:39 AM

      Woot! I wanted to branch out and try a different theme.

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  24. Myrna R.February 18, 2018 at 9:25 PM

    Sensual, sad and real. Your poem captures these feelings and yearnings so well.

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  25. ThotpurgeFebruary 18, 2018 at 11:26 PM

    Agree with Myrna.. sensual, sad and real! Can one really fight that once it sets in?

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    1. RommyFebruary 19, 2018 at 10:41 AM

      Yeah, it gets very sad as I pull back and picture the whole scenario.

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  26. hyperCRYPTICalFebruary 19, 2018 at 1:53 PM

    This is so good! The close is sticky-lipped perfect!
    You MUST now plan revenge...
    Anna :o]

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  27. MNL (Cactus Haiku)February 20, 2018 at 2:43 AM

    ouch, that hurts! Very vivid senryu!

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  28. Rosemary Nissen-WadeFebruary 21, 2018 at 8:23 AM

    So succinct and powerful. Love the title!

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