Words By the Ocean

Promises were made by the ocean,
where sweet and salt met
and flowed into each other.
Promises began earlier,
marked during the passage of the sun
and affirmed in the fullness of the moon.

I unbound my hair then,
allowing my curls to express themselves.
I whispered a promise to the stars,
unaware they could and would
answer back.

Smooth stones paid witness,
to the power of the elements
to change things,
and to my words.

Perhaps today I would
be able to hear them ask,
“Do you know what it is you promise?”
But of course today I would answer,
“I do.” 


This poem was inspired by the prompt given over at A Dash of Sunny, Take Me to the Ocean

34 comments:

  1. You had me by the opening three lines - simply beautiful...in hindsight i suppose we may know what the answer would be - a fantastic poem

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    1. Sometimes what seems so mysterious can seem so simple in hind sight. Thanks!

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  2. Smooth stones paid witness,
    to the power of the elements
    to change things

    Gosh! Such a whole lot of mysticism and allure in this poem :D
    Powerfully expressed! Thank you so much for participating :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. Thankee! I wasn't sure exactly how I'd approach this prompt, but I'm pleased with the result.

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  3. So very, very lovely! I especially love the last stanza!

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  4. This is truly gorgeous. Just beautifully crafted.

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  5. lluv the surprise of the "answer back"

    have a good week

    much love...

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  6. Love the ritualistic tone of this poem. I am there with your speaker, watching as Nature do her thing, listening to the questions, and whispering, "Me, too."

    Love, love, love the beauty of the language.

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    1. A rocky shore on a moonlit light is very good inspiration!

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  7. Every bit of this builds perfectly on the next bit. I am in love with this poem.

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    1. Thanks! I'm glad the flow turned out the way it did.

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  8. What a lovely 'down to the sea' poem.

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  9. Very nice, I want to go. (My train doesn't go to our beach)
    ..

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    1. I don't get to go to the seashore as often as I'd like either, but it is such a wonderful inspiration when I do get to go.

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  10. There is such a magnetic pull in your lines... my feet want to feel sand.

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    1. The shore will do that to a person

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  11. I love the gentleness of this and yet felt a hidden passion

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    1. I'm thrilled that aspect came through!

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  12. " my curls [to] express themselves" so beautifully right up to the final declaration - great ending

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    1. *grin* Thank you for stopping by!

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  13. "Where sweet and salt met" particularly like that!

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    1. Areas where fresh water meets salt water seem like such magical places to me.

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  14. "I whispered a promise to the stars,
    unaware they could and would
    answer back."...awww....how lovely is this...

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  15. Wonderful write Rommy put me in a peaceful mood!

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    1. I'm glad I could channel some of that peace being by the ocean brings into my words.

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