Promises were made by the ocean,
where sweet and salt met
and flowed into each other.
Promises began earlier,
marked during the passage of the sun
and affirmed in the fullness of the moon.
I unbound my hair then,
allowing my curls to express themselves.
I whispered a promise to the stars,
unaware they could and would
answer back.
Smooth stones paid witness,
to the power of the elements
to change things,
and to my words.
Perhaps today I would
be able to hear them ask,
“Do you know what it is you promise?”
But of course today I would answer,
“I do.”
Song Choice: River of Dreams by Billy Joel
This poem was inspired by the prompt given over at A Dash of Sunny, Take Me to the Ocean
You had me by the opening three lines - simply beautiful...in hindsight i suppose we may know what the answer would be - a fantastic poem
ReplyDeleteSometimes what seems so mysterious can seem so simple in hind sight. Thanks!
DeleteSmooth stones paid witness,
ReplyDeleteto the power of the elements
to change things
Gosh! Such a whole lot of mysticism and allure in this poem :D
Powerfully expressed! Thank you so much for participating :D
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thankee! I wasn't sure exactly how I'd approach this prompt, but I'm pleased with the result.
DeleteSo very, very lovely! I especially love the last stanza!
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it!
DeleteThis is truly gorgeous. Just beautifully crafted.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
Deletelluv the surprise of the "answer back"
ReplyDeletehave a good week
much love...
You as well!
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ReplyDelete<3 back 'atcha
DeleteLove the ritualistic tone of this poem. I am there with your speaker, watching as Nature do her thing, listening to the questions, and whispering, "Me, too."
ReplyDeleteLove, love, love the beauty of the language.
A rocky shore on a moonlit light is very good inspiration!
DeleteEvery bit of this builds perfectly on the next bit. I am in love with this poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm glad the flow turned out the way it did.
DeleteWhat a lovely 'down to the sea' poem.
ReplyDeleteThankee!
DeleteVery nice, I want to go. (My train doesn't go to our beach)
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I don't get to go to the seashore as often as I'd like either, but it is such a wonderful inspiration when I do get to go.
DeleteThere is such a magnetic pull in your lines... my feet want to feel sand.
ReplyDeleteThe shore will do that to a person
DeleteI love the gentleness of this and yet felt a hidden passion
ReplyDeleteI'm thrilled that aspect came through!
Delete" my curls [to] express themselves" so beautifully right up to the final declaration - great ending
ReplyDelete*grin* Thank you for stopping by!
DeleteBeautiful! Very magical!
ReplyDeleteThanks! :)
Delete"Where sweet and salt met" particularly like that!
ReplyDeleteAreas where fresh water meets salt water seem like such magical places to me.
Delete"I whispered a promise to the stars,
ReplyDeleteunaware they could and would
answer back."...awww....how lovely is this...
Thank you :)
DeleteWonderful write Rommy put me in a peaceful mood!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I could channel some of that peace being by the ocean brings into my words.
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