Unvanishing

Spaces between can be stretched, like shadows lengthening in the fading day. Strange magic tugs on atoms, bending and pulling objects until they vanish. She does not understand that it is herself she wishes to make gone when she says her words into the waiting air. She only speaks the words, “Make it go,” and mass, neither created nor destroyed, rearranges itself elsewhere. It is simpler to make things disappear instead of feelings.

Easy to banish
a bowl or a trinket, still
the shadows remain.


Photo by Jellico's Stationhouse

This story told in haibun came from a combination of the picture prompt given over at Friday Fictioneers and the prompt from Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads, Physics with Bjorn: Space time and the theory of special relativity

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    1. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by!

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  2. Yes, magical and sad. This is so very good!

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  3. Everything I love about Professor McGonagall's answer to the Ravenclaw riddle about vanished objects is captured in your writing here...

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    1. That is high praise. JK Rowling is one of my heroes.

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  4. "it is herself she wishes to make gone" The power of this line will stay with me for days and days and days... It is wonderful to see her reach that realization, and imagining what she will do next, how this knowing will reshape the rest of her tale.

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    1. I am pretty excited to see the story develop too.

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  5. so much to enjoy in your writing here...stretching space like lengthening shadows, tugging atoms, bending and pulling objects to make them vanish...all allude to a manipulation of space-time which in some way misses what is actually present that needs made 'gone'...wonderful...look forward to seeing where this takes you.

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    1. As am I. Bjorn's prompt was challenging, and combining it with the picture added another level of difficulty. But when I thought of how well both fit with my current project I couldn't not take it on.

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  6. Dear Rommy,

    Poetic and haunting.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. Interesting take on the photo. This will require some thought-time to consider. Good write.

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  8. 'She does not understand that it is herself she wishes to make gone when she says her words into the waiting air' sigh.. there is such a palpable sense of sadness and longing in your verse..❤️

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    1. I'm glad I was able to convey that

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  9. I wonder if the shadows really disappears... maybe we need them... maybe they will make us sink, but they never go away.

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    1. Oh I think they'll linger in some form or another.

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  10. It is easier to make things disappear than feelings. Great line.

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  11. Entertaining and wise. Very well done.

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  12. So true (and still there's more)

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  13. So very you. I love how you and your Muse dance, Rommy

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  14. I feel this is part of a story. I feel the pain, yet I don't know the reason. I suppose I could write my own pain into it. Beautiful work

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    1. It was meant to be a little story on its own, but yes, it could easily be larger.

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  15. A very graceful and wistful haibun. Also, a very true one.

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    1. I'm glad I decided to give this format a whirl. I wasn't sure how it would turn out, but I'm happy with the results.

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    1. For all the talk of magic in it, yes, yes indeed.

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  17. Interesting that it is herself she wants to make gone with her words.

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  19. Forgive me my flippant comment but the first thing that popped into my head was, she could work her magic on my excess pounds any time. :)

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  20. Beautiful and melancholic, full of wisdom, too. I love it.

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