Spaces between can be stretched, like shadows lengthening in
the fading day. Strange magic tugs on atoms, bending and pulling objects until
they vanish. She does not understand that it is herself she wishes to make gone
when she says her words into the waiting air. She only speaks the words, “Make
it go,” and mass, neither created nor destroyed, rearranges itself elsewhere.
It is simpler to make things disappear instead of feelings.
Easy to banish
a bowl or a trinket, still
the shadows remain.
Song Choice: Smile by Nat King Cole
Photo by Jellico's Stationhouse
This story told in haibun came from a combination of the picture prompt given over at Friday Fictioneers and the prompt from Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads, Physics with Bjorn: Space time and the theory of special relativity.
Magical and lovely
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteYes, magical and sad. This is so very good!
ReplyDeleteYay! Thanks <3
DeleteEverything I love about Professor McGonagall's answer to the Ravenclaw riddle about vanished objects is captured in your writing here...
ReplyDeleteThat is high praise. JK Rowling is one of my heroes.
DeleteThis is very profound, Rommy.
ReplyDeleteI am glad you enjoyed it.
Delete"it is herself she wishes to make gone" The power of this line will stay with me for days and days and days... It is wonderful to see her reach that realization, and imagining what she will do next, how this knowing will reshape the rest of her tale.
ReplyDeleteI am pretty excited to see the story develop too.
Deleteso much to enjoy in your writing here...stretching space like lengthening shadows, tugging atoms, bending and pulling objects to make them vanish...all allude to a manipulation of space-time which in some way misses what is actually present that needs made 'gone'...wonderful...look forward to seeing where this takes you.
ReplyDeleteAs am I. Bjorn's prompt was challenging, and combining it with the picture added another level of difficulty. But when I thought of how well both fit with my current project I couldn't not take it on.
DeleteDear Rommy,
ReplyDeletePoetic and haunting.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for stopping by Rochelle
DeleteInteresting take on the photo. This will require some thought-time to consider. Good write.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by
Delete'She does not understand that it is herself she wishes to make gone when she says her words into the waiting air' sigh.. there is such a palpable sense of sadness and longing in your verse..❤️
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I was able to convey that
DeleteI wonder if the shadows really disappears... maybe we need them... maybe they will make us sink, but they never go away.
ReplyDeleteOh I think they'll linger in some form or another.
DeleteIt is easier to make things disappear than feelings. Great line.
ReplyDeleteThanks Russell
DeleteEntertaining and wise. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it
DeleteAs Kerry said, profound.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rosemary
DeleteSo true (and still there's more)
ReplyDeleteOh there always is :)
DeleteSo very you. I love how you and your Muse dance, Rommy
ReplyDeleteThanks Ben!
DeleteI feel this is part of a story. I feel the pain, yet I don't know the reason. I suppose I could write my own pain into it. Beautiful work
ReplyDeleteIt was meant to be a little story on its own, but yes, it could easily be larger.
Deleteindeed it is ~
ReplyDeleteThough we still try
DeleteBeautifully done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandra
DeleteA very graceful and wistful haibun. Also, a very true one.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I decided to give this format a whirl. I wasn't sure how it would turn out, but I'm happy with the results.
DeleteA true story.
ReplyDeleteFor all the talk of magic in it, yes, yes indeed.
DeleteInteresting that it is herself she wants to make gone with her words.
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ReplyDeleteForgive me my flippant comment but the first thing that popped into my head was, she could work her magic on my excess pounds any time. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteVery powerful and very moving!!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and melancholic, full of wisdom, too. I love it.
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