Revelations

Fall revealed the rot
of branches hidden in spring.
I can't deny it
exists to avoid my pain
lest it consumes the good left.

Song Choice: Praying by Kesha

This poem was created for a prompt given by Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads, A Skyflower Friday: Goodbye. Hop on down to the pond to see more poetic inspirations from the rest of the Toads. It is also linked to Poets United: Poetry Pantry 381
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44 comments:

  1. Kerry O'ConnorNovember 30, 2017 at 1:53 PM

    What a wonderful poem with which to kick off this particular prompt! Every line resounds with rue and wisdom.

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    1. Magaly GuerreroNovember 30, 2017 at 9:47 PM

      I, too, have to say that I can't pick a line as my favorite. They are all so powerful.

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    2. RommyDecember 1, 2017 at 11:46 AM

      I am glad you guys liked it! Tanka can be tricky but I'm enjoying playing with it.

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  2. MargaretNovember 30, 2017 at 2:21 PM

    Sometimes the brambles and vines and rot are best hidden by foliage for a while :) A horse at our barn got into a mess - had a mess of a mane and tail! This poem is so tightly written and full of wisdom!

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    1. RommyDecember 1, 2017 at 11:47 AM

      Oh no! That must have been a real pain to clean up.

      Thanks for stopping by :)

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  3. Kim M. RussellNovember 30, 2017 at 3:22 PM

    Goodbye to rot - and spring will be here sooner than we think.

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    1. RommyDecember 1, 2017 at 11:47 AM

      And with spring, hopefully there will be new growth

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  4. Magaly GuerreroNovember 30, 2017 at 9:46 PM

    It's all about balance. Nature (and life) can be harsh, but somehow the world finds huge little ways to keep us from losing our minds.

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  5. BrendanDecember 1, 2017 at 5:17 AM

    That surely is the nature of revelation, Rommy. Equal parts vision and confession.

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  6. Sanaa RizviDecember 1, 2017 at 6:09 AM

    This is so poignant, Rommy! Life can be cruel at times. Sometimes when we set foot into the world we are knocked down by a storm of pain and despair. When we feel hurt dip its toes into the sea-tides of our soul, there are moments faint when we cannot cope.

    It's love and hope that in the end help us regain our footing.. as 'the rot of branches' is replaced by the blooms in Spring.

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    1. RommyDecember 1, 2017 at 11:49 AM

      It's hard to imagine we can stand up straight again, when we get knocked down hard. But the wheel turns and there's always a chance to stand up again.

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  7. Sherry Blue SkyDecember 1, 2017 at 1:17 PM

    The thought of the rot consuming the good that is left is painful.....maybe we can view it as a bedding ground for new growth instead. They say those piles of leaves are breeding grounds for butterflies. Smiles.

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    1. RommyDecember 2, 2017 at 6:55 AM

      It is possible for good to be reborn from the wreckage.

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  8. purplepeninportland.comDecember 1, 2017 at 3:44 PM

    I love this, Rommy! That good has to be carefully looked for, because the bad is always obvious.

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  9. brudbergDecember 1, 2017 at 4:38 PM

    I have to think that we need to take care of the good to be able to grow again in the spring.. love the metaphor.

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  10. Susie ClevengerDecember 1, 2017 at 5:57 PM

    Rot is powerful and to think of it destroying the good is such agony. May spring renew all of us.

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    1. RommyDecember 2, 2017 at 11:14 AM

      Exactly. It's best to keep the rot from claiming more than it needs to, and use it so the regrowth will be that much stronger.

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  11. tonispencerDecember 1, 2017 at 9:06 PM

    Great metaphor! the good sometimes must be hidden to make us look for it rather than taking it for granted.

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    1. RommyDecember 2, 2017 at 11:14 AM

      I certainly don't recommend taking anything for granted

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  12. Maude LynnDecember 2, 2017 at 8:59 AM

    Love those opening lines!

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  13. Magical Mystical TeacherDecember 3, 2017 at 8:06 AM

    Those hidden things tend to rot, don't they?

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  14. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerDecember 3, 2017 at 2:29 PM

    Sometimes we just have to uncover those parts of our lives and let them see the sun!

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    1. RommyDecember 4, 2017 at 9:31 AM

      Very true. We gain nothing by keeping them hidden.

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  15. MaryDecember 3, 2017 at 2:42 PM

    I am sure there is a lot of rot in people's lives that is hidden away.....

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  16. ZQDecember 3, 2017 at 3:10 PM

    Dark~ well expressed.
    ZQ

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  17. Donna@LivingFromHappinessDecember 3, 2017 at 3:43 PM

    We do have to cut away that which no longer serves us on our journey...beautifully stated.

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    1. RommyDecember 4, 2017 at 9:35 AM

      Yes, or it runs the possibility of tainting any future endeavors.

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  18. Old EggDecember 3, 2017 at 4:57 PM

    Sadly humans have a different mindset and try to deny the circle of life and death rather than accept it and make the most of their time. In doing so they kill and destroy without thought even themselves.

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  19. indybevDecember 3, 2017 at 5:50 PM

    Fall allows us to see that which we need to let go and prepare for the welcome rejuvenation of spring! Well said.

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    1. RommyDecember 4, 2017 at 9:38 AM

      Exactly. And we'd do well to take the opportunity to really look at things in that moment so we can decide what serves us and what doesn't.

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  20. ThotpurgeDecember 3, 2017 at 7:32 PM

    the rot of branches hidden in spring.. nicely said!!

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  21. Wendy BourkeDecember 3, 2017 at 8:16 PM

    A wonderfully rendered tanka with a brilliant pivot line.

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