Even the Sky

Even the sky blushes when it thinks of the night to come. Anticipating the taste of you, the day passed so slowly. But your touch can stop time, making star lit night grow longer and punishing day for taking so long to yield.


Waiting for your skin
to alight upon my body
is sweet agony.



This poem was inspired by a prompt given over at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads: Fashion Me Your Words, Slowly. It is also linked to the Friday 55 at Verse Escape and Poetry Pantry 385 at Poets United.

 I seriously love the song behind the prompt, especially because as a Spanish speaker, I know how unsubtle that song is. This was crazy fun to write.

62 comments:

  1. The sensuous touch of the poem and its freshness is felt sweetly:)

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  2. This is gorgeous, Rommy--I especially heaved a languorous sigh over "... punishing day for taking so long to yield..." Pure natural love is always hot and sweet like this. (And speaking of hot and sweet, I also enjoyed the musical accompaniment.) Thanks for adding your 55 words of kindling warmth to the chilly winds of the season, and have a kickass holiday.

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    1. Always happy to play along. Have a terrific holiday.

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  3. Wow that "punshing day" is a slow as slow gets. Thanks for a really clever haibun. Well Done!!!

    Thanks for responding to my prompt

    Here's wishing You and Yours - A Very Merry Christmas

    much love...

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    1. Thanks Gillena! Have a very Merry Christmas

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    1. *best Mr. Burns impersonation* Excellent!

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  5. I much like the image of the blushing sky. A beautiful tender voice here
    Merry Christmas to you!

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  6. Love a night that can cause the day to blush... a well deserved night after such waiting.

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    1. It certainly makes waiting worthwhile.

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  7. Physical love can be much like this poem, the anticipation, the sweet hot touches, the tastes. I love that the night makes the sky blush, as well it should!

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  8. "Your touch can stop time".. says everything.

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  9. Loved each line of this sensuous write

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  10. "lit night grow longer and punishing day for taking so long to yield."

    I love that; also the senryu. Very sexy stuff, girl.

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  11. P.S. Now I'm picturing Night giving Day a spanking. :P

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  12. The feeling of waiting...ah! you just can't bottle it. Perfect.
    Wishing you all the best and Merry Christmas

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  13. Beautiful, Rommy: 'But your touch can stop time, making star lit night grow longer'. Seasons greetings!

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    1. To you as well! Have a fabulous celebration of, well, whatever it is you most want to celebrate. :)

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  14. If you just heard a squeal, don't panic--it was just me coming to the end of your poem. What a piece of delight, Rommy. The images, the truth of it, the promises... the music you chose to pair it with. Yum-Yummiest!

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    1. This was just so much fun to write. Every time I hear that song I wondered if people knew how dirty it really was. So I guess I felt called to make it really damn clear. :D

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    2. I came back for seconds... and found myself shivering while grinning. Delicious the first time around, and just wonderful now.

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  15. Goodness gracious is it hot in here?! Passionate write, Rommy!!💞

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  16. This is so unusual and cool! I love it. Well Lafayette, I am here cos the thought of you having to be good on my account was distressing, lol. (You were nice to let me know I was missed. Thx.)

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    1. I am glad you are feeling well enough to write. I hope you make a full recovery soon.

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  17. Beautifully sensual... Love "even the sky blushes" Now that is some passion!

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  18. I like the tender anticipation in this. The longing clearly shines through in your lines. Beautiful

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    1. I am so glad I was able to convey that

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  19. punishing day for taking so long to yield... wonderfully written!

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    1. I have to admit I had a good giggle when I wrote that. At first it seemed over the top, but then I thought, hell why not.

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  20. Breathless sensuality here! Whew!

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  21. How lovely, to have someone to long for through the day. Sigh. Beautifully written.

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  22. No subtleties needed. Your words make this poem sizzle. I love the inspirational song too. Slow is good.

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  23. I must confess that when I read a poem of such passion I try to imagine meeting the author and looking in her eyes. Absolutely stunning Rommy.

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  24. An exquisite haibun, wonderfully rendered. Brilliant writing!

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  25. So gorgeously sensual, it makes me quiver all over!

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    1. Woot! I'm glad that my words were so effective.

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  26. OOH, cool! I love the image of sky blushing and a kiss that stops time.

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