Even the Sky

Even the sky blushes when it thinks of the night to come. Anticipating the taste of you, the day passed so slowly. But your touch can stop time, making star lit night grow longer and punishing day for taking so long to yield.


Waiting for your skin
to alight upon my body
is sweet agony.


Song Choice: Despacito by Luis Fonsi and Daddy Yankee

This poem was inspired by a prompt given over at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads: Fashion Me Your Words, Slowly. It is also linked to the Friday 55 at Verse Escape and Poetry Pantry 385 at Poets United.

 I seriously love the song behind the prompt, especially because as a Spanish speaker, I know how unsubtle that song is. This was crazy fun to write.
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60 comments:

  1. Dr. Vandana SharmaDecember 23, 2017 at 8:51 AM

    The sensuous touch of the poem and its freshness is felt sweetly:)

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  2. hedgewitchDecember 23, 2017 at 9:08 AM

    This is gorgeous, Rommy--I especially heaved a languorous sigh over "... punishing day for taking so long to yield..." Pure natural love is always hot and sweet like this. (And speaking of hot and sweet, I also enjoyed the musical accompaniment.) Thanks for adding your 55 words of kindling warmth to the chilly winds of the season, and have a kickass holiday.

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    1. RommyDecember 23, 2017 at 7:35 PM

      Always happy to play along. Have a terrific holiday.

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  3. Gillena CoxDecember 23, 2017 at 9:28 AM

    Wow that "punshing day" is a slow as slow gets. Thanks for a really clever haibun. Well Done!!!

    Thanks for responding to my prompt

    Here's wishing You and Yours - A Very Merry Christmas

    much love...

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  4. Debra She Who SeeksDecember 23, 2017 at 9:31 AM

    *fanning self* Yowza!

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  5. brudbergDecember 23, 2017 at 10:38 AM

    Love a night that can cause the day to blush... a well deserved night after such waiting.

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  6. tonispencerDecember 23, 2017 at 12:51 PM

    Physical love can be much like this poem, the anticipation, the sweet hot touches, the tastes. I love that the night makes the sky blush, as well it should!

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  7. Kerry O'ConnorDecember 23, 2017 at 12:55 PM

    "Your touch can stop time".. says everything.

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  8. NamrathaDecember 23, 2017 at 1:16 PM

    Loved each line of this sensuous write

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  9. ✿December 23, 2017 at 7:02 PM

    "lit night grow longer and punishing day for taking so long to yield."

    I love that; also the senryu. Very sexy stuff, girl.

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  10. ✿December 23, 2017 at 7:03 PM

    P.S. Now I'm picturing Night giving Day a spanking. :P

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  11. RommyDecember 23, 2017 at 7:36 PM

    Thanks!

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  12. Vivian ZemsDecember 24, 2017 at 6:05 AM

    The feeling of waiting...ah! you just can't bottle it. Perfect.
    Wishing you all the best and Merry Christmas

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  13. Kim M. RussellDecember 24, 2017 at 1:42 PM

    Beautiful, Rommy: 'But your touch can stop time, making star lit night grow longer'. Seasons greetings!

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    1. RommyDecember 24, 2017 at 5:06 PM

      To you as well! Have a fabulous celebration of, well, whatever it is you most want to celebrate. :)

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  14. Magaly GuerreroDecember 24, 2017 at 3:48 PM

    If you just heard a squeal, don't panic--it was just me coming to the end of your poem. What a piece of delight, Rommy. The images, the truth of it, the promises... the music you chose to pair it with. Yum-Yummiest!

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    1. RommyDecember 24, 2017 at 5:07 PM

      This was just so much fun to write. Every time I hear that song I wondered if people knew how dirty it really was. So I guess I felt called to make it really damn clear. :D

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    2. Magaly GuerreroJanuary 7, 2018 at 10:08 AM

      I came back for seconds... and found myself shivering while grinning. Delicious the first time around, and just wonderful now.

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    3. RommyJanuary 7, 2018 at 1:10 PM

      Most excellent!

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  15. Sanaa RizviDecember 25, 2017 at 7:10 AM

    Goodness gracious is it hot in here?! Passionate write, Rommy!!💞

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  16. FireblossomDecember 25, 2017 at 8:21 PM

    This is so unusual and cool! I love it. Well Lafayette, I am here cos the thought of you having to be good on my account was distressing, lol. (You were nice to let me know I was missed. Thx.)

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    1. RommyDecember 27, 2017 at 2:58 PM

      I am glad you are feeling well enough to write. I hope you make a full recovery soon.

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  17. MNL (Cactus Haiku)December 26, 2017 at 1:03 PM

    Lovely!

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  18. RommyDecember 27, 2017 at 2:58 PM

    Thanks!

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  19. Susie ClevengerDecember 29, 2017 at 3:08 PM

    Beautifully sensual... Love "even the sky blushes" Now that is some passion!

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  20. Jae RoseJanuary 7, 2018 at 7:09 AM

    Such passion - fantastic!

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  21. ThotpurgeJanuary 7, 2018 at 7:23 AM

    punishing day for taking so long to yield... wonderfully written!

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    1. RommyJanuary 7, 2018 at 1:12 PM

      I have to admit I had a good giggle when I wrote that. At first it seemed over the top, but then I thought, hell why not.

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  22. MaryJanuary 7, 2018 at 9:14 AM

    Breathless sensuality here! Whew!

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  23. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 7, 2018 at 11:54 AM

    How lovely, to have someone to long for through the day. Sigh. Beautifully written.

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  24. RommyJanuary 7, 2018 at 1:11 PM

    I am so glad I was able to convey that

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  25. Donna@LivingFromHappinessJanuary 7, 2018 at 1:58 PM

    What a passionate poem of deep love!

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  26. Myrna R.January 7, 2018 at 5:41 PM

    No subtleties needed. Your words make this poem sizzle. I love the inspirational song too. Slow is good.

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  27. Old EggJanuary 7, 2018 at 6:48 PM

    I must confess that when I read a poem of such passion I try to imagine meeting the author and looking in her eyes. Absolutely stunning Rommy.

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  28. Wendy BourkeJanuary 7, 2018 at 8:15 PM

    An exquisite haibun, wonderfully rendered. Brilliant writing!

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  29. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 8, 2018 at 2:16 AM

    So gorgeously sensual, it makes me quiver all over!

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    1. RommyJanuary 8, 2018 at 10:47 AM

      Woot! I'm glad that my words were so effective.

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  30. Laura RussellJanuary 11, 2018 at 5:15 PM

    OOH, cool! I love the image of sky blushing and a kiss that stops time.

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