Dreadful headlines buffet the breath from my body. I recoil
from their continued assault, only to be knocked over like bug on its back. The
natural comfort of my carapace becomes a trap. I flail, finding no purchase in the
air I flew freely through not so long ago. News marches on. I feel the whoosh
as its passing feet come close to crushing me in this vulnerable position. A
well timed gust of wind combined with the wriggle of my legs helps me
rediscover my center. I go to my place of safety, and remember though I am small,
I am also not alone. There are far more of me, buzzing, whirring and clicking
in every city and town. And together we are a swarm that outnumbers them all.
Uncaring footfalls
promise my annihilation
unless I stand up.
Fear threatens to entomb me
but anger keeps me fighting.
dreadful
annihilation
breath
the
comfort
natural
their
a
on
continue
anger
to
rediscover
The quote given:
“People disappear when they die. Their voice, their laughter, the warmth of their breath. Their flesh. Eventually their bones. All living memory of them ceases. This is both dreadful and natural. Yet for some there is an exception to this annihilation. For in the books they write they continue to exist. We can rediscover them. Their humor, their tone of voice, their moods. Through the written word they can anger you or make you happy. They can comfort you. They can perplex you. They can alter you. All this, even though they are dead. Like flies in amber, like corpses frozen in the ice, that which according to the laws of nature should pass away is, by the miracle of ink on paper, preserved. It is a kind of magic.” ~ Diane Setterfield
The quote given:
“People disappear when they die. Their voice, their laughter, the warmth of their breath. Their flesh. Eventually their bones. All living memory of them ceases. This is both dreadful and natural. Yet for some there is an exception to this annihilation. For in the books they write they continue to exist. We can rediscover them. Their humor, their tone of voice, their moods. Through the written word they can anger you or make you happy. They can comfort you. They can perplex you. They can alter you. All this, even though they are dead. Like flies in amber, like corpses frozen in the ice, that which according to the laws of nature should pass away is, by the miracle of ink on paper, preserved. It is a kind of magic.” ~ Diane Setterfield
Such an imaginative take on the writing challenge
ReplyDeleteThanks Jae
DeleteWow, powerful metaphor and powerful sentiments.
ReplyDeleteI did try. I'm not always the greatest with this kind of challenge, but I did all right. I should probably try more like these to help me grow as a poet.
DeleteYowza!💞 This is unbelievably potent, Rommy!💞
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanaa!
DeleteMy inner prompt goddess--yes, I have one of those--wants to bang on her chest, while howling, "I prompted this! Hear me roar." Goodness, Rommy, that ending. What it says about anger wears my heart as its face. Too many people see rage as something crippling (and it can be). But if we take that seemingly ever-destructive fire and re-purpose it, we can birth wonders out of the energy... we can even feed our cool.
ReplyDeleteYum, yum... RAWR!
Thanks! I'm glad I was able to convey the things I wanted to within the scope of the challenge.
DeleteYour words sing like an anthem! Let’s swarm!
ReplyDeleteWoot!
DeleteWow, I am SO impressed. Such strong sentiments so powerfully expressed :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks LC!
Deletethough I am small, I am also not alone.
ReplyDeleteOnce we realize this, nothing is impossible!
Absolutely!
DeleteI can relate to these words, these fears, these feelings and the metaphoric language enriches the entire reading experience.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry
DeleteSo appropriate for today's world!
ReplyDeleteQuite appropriate yes
DeleteLuv your wind and the way you come back fighting with the anger .great clash of metaphor titans
ReplyDeleteMuch🌼love
Thanks Gillena
DeleteAn impressive response to the prompt. Wow!
ReplyDeleteGlad I exceeded expectations. :)
DeleteI love the direction this poem took. It was as forceful as a marching band.
ReplyDeleteWoot! Though 76 Insects doesn't quite have the same ring to it as 76 Trombones
Deletethough I am small, I am also not alone...oh my yes! Throwing back my head and howling....
ReplyDeleteLet 'er rip!
DeleteThis is really a very artful use of metaphor, Rommy, and you don't just fling it out there but flesh it out word by word and bring it to fruition, from the rock of the carapace to the vulnerability to crushing, to the buzz of our numbers when we finally come together en masse--o yes, locusts can devour an entire country, or at least the parts that need to be eaten away, in this case...
ReplyDeleteInsects do excel at dealing with decay so that there's room for better things to grow.
DeleteSuch vivid imagery... this was exceptional, Rommy
ReplyDeleteThanks Vivian
DeleteA well-crafted haibun, Rommy. I love the alliteration in 'buffet the breath from my body' to convey the shock of the headlines, and the nod to Kafka in 'the natural comfort of my carapace becomes a trap'. 'News marches on' brings us back to reality. The ending is quite horrific: 'There are far more of me, buzzing, whirring and clicking in every city and town. And together we are a swarm that outnumbers them all'.The final lines of the tanka give voice to what most of us think.
ReplyDeleteI definitely wanted to get that Kafka-esque feel to it, and yes turn the tables on the idea of helplessness. I'm glad that bit of horror came through.
DeleteThis reminded me of my childhood and enjoing having a bug on my hand to check me out and probably sucking up the sweat and thinking that it wasn't a bad place for a short break before opening its wings shell (elytra) and flying off again. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteI liked trying to get lightning bugs to land on me in the summertime
DeleteGood Sunday Rommy
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Thanks Gillena. Hope your Sunday was good.
DeleteSometimes anger is very useful. We have to use it to our advantage in some situations!
ReplyDeleteYes indeed
DeleteI like to think we're a rising swarm of reason that will restore sanity to our leadership! Well written.
ReplyDeleteI'd definitely like to think that too
Deletewonderful poem... lots of images pop into my mind when I read this
ReplyDeleteYay! Thanks for stopping by
DeleteLove, love, love this....and how I have felt.....no longer willing to be squashed like a bug....there are far more of us to fight.
ReplyDeleteMe either!
DeletePowerful poem!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ayala
DeleteWhat a wonderful rallying cry. I am one of those bugs too, part of the swarm.
ReplyDeleteLove this poem!
Buzz on fellow swarm member!
DeleteA fascinating post. You rose to the challenge, I think, brilliantly. The tanka, in particularly, gives pause ... stunning.
ReplyDeleteI always get a little nervous with this kind of challenge, because I want to use the words I'm given well. I'm glad I was able to create a solid piece from it.
DeleteWow! You did fine : )
ReplyDeleteThanks ZQ
DeleteTogether we are a swarm... love that hopefulness in times like ours!
ReplyDeleteHope is what keeps people going :)
DeleteI enjoyed reading. That's right get up and get angry!!
ReplyDeleteWoot!
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