Proto-Mouse (In the Last Days of the Dinosaurs)

I did not witness the first strike
but I had already seen the signs
that came even before the ill-omened moon
and understood the end was near.

I did not have to measure
those deep and ancient fault lines
to be wary of the poison I could smell inside them
well before I scampered too near.

The impact ignited the built-up gas
devouring any possibility
of sound over the screaming flames.

And it took no great cunning
to know this poisoned air
would burn down all of the history 
of a once lush era.





Liner Notes for This Groove: This poem is linked to Poets and Storytellers United's Friday Writings.

29 comments:

  1. Oh this is a great extinction survival story - love it. Am writing a series on climate change, so have been thinking about species extinction a lot. This definitely resonates! My poem is about a species that was lost too!

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    1. I'm looking forward to reading your series.

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  2. A great eerie poem Love 'screaming flames'

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  3. History of a once lush era is precise. Scary but unstoppable. I could almost visualise it.

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  4. Poignant words of what was and is now … my thoughts turn to the burning of current history and books and threat of nuclear annihilation in this lush era.

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    1. While that wasn't on my mind when I wrote this, I can easily see this interpretation.

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  5. Love your take, Rommy! Very innovative! Couldn't have imagined a Proto Mouse stalking then (must be biggies like the dinosaurs)

    Hank

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  6. But the mouse prototype survived! Small enough to hide.

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    1. Astute observation. And yes, that was an intentional choice on my part. Delighted that someone caught it.

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  7. Sic transit Gloria - in one fell swoop. I wouldn't like to have faced those teeth when they were able to bite! :-)

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    1. I imagine it would be rather unpleasant to be among a pack of them when they are in a high dudgeon.

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  8. And in the next "last days" I wonder what the mouse will witness? Hopefully not homo sapien's demise.

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  9. As we continue to clear cut trees in my gorgeous High Desert city, I wonder "will we ever be lush again?" I am doubtful. A thoughtful poem Rommy.

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  10. Thi͏s poe͏m i͏s a͏ powe͏rful a͏nd thought-provoki͏ng pi͏e͏ce͏ tha͏t ski͏llfully ca͏pture͏s the͏ e͏sse͏nce͏ of a͏n a͏poca͏lypti͏c mome͏nt i͏n Ea͏rth's hi͏story. You've͏ e͏xce͏lle͏d i͏n conve͏yi͏ng a͏ se͏nse͏ of i͏mpe͏ndi͏ng doom a͏nd the͏ re͏si͏li͏e͏nce͏ of li͏fe͏ i͏n the͏ fa͏ce͏ of ca͏ta͏strophe͏. The͏ i͏ma͏ge͏ry you've͏ use͏d, such a͏s the͏ "i͏ll-ome͏ne͏d moon" a͏nd the͏ "poi͏sone͏d a͏i͏r," a͏dds de͏pth a͏nd i͏nte͏nsi͏ty to the͏ na͏rra͏ti͏ve͏. Your portra͏ya͏l of the͏ "proto-mouse͏" a͏s a͏n obse͏rve͏r of the͏se͏ ca͏ta͏strophi͏c e͏ve͏nts, wi͏tne͏ssi͏ng the͏ si͏gns of i͏mpe͏ndi͏ng di͏sa͏ste͏r, i͏s pa͏rti͏cula͏rly e͏voca͏ti͏ve͏. Furthe͏rmore͏, the͏ wa͏y you've͏ de͏scri͏be͏d the͏ i͏mpa͏ct a͏nd i͏ts de͏va͏sta͏ti͏ng conse͏que͏nce͏s i͏s both vi͏vi͏d a͏nd ha͏unti͏ng. The͏ use͏ of the͏ phra͏se͏ "burn down a͏ll of the͏ hi͏story" ca͏rri͏e͏s a͏ profound se͏nse͏ of loss a͏nd fi͏na͏li͏ty. Ove͏ra͏ll, your i͏nte͏rpre͏ta͏ti͏on of the͏ prompt i͏s comme͏nda͏ble͏. Thi͏s poe͏m offe͏rs re͏a͏de͏rs a͏ uni͏que͏ pe͏rspe͏cti͏ve͏ on a͏ mome͏nt i͏n pre͏hi͏stori͏c ti͏me͏s, a͏nd your use͏ of la͏ngua͏ge͏ a͏nd i͏ma͏ge͏ry e͏ffe͏cti͏ve͏ly conve͏ys the͏ e͏moti͏ons a͏nd a͏tmosphe͏re͏ of tha͏t e͏ra͏. 👍👌👏😊

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  11. Such an atmospheric poem, Rommy. A great sense of the apocalyptic end of the world feel here, which is was for the dinos. Really make you wonder how it truly came about (we believe it was an asteroid but who knows really?). The title anchors the poem vividly.

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  12. Like the proverbial train wreck, some disasters whisper (and often roar) their coming. And no matter how close we are to ground zero, we can only watch (blink a lot) and hope for the best.

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  13. It fascinates me how the knowledge of dinosaurs has changed over the years and how we realize original info was wrong - they even put their bones together incorrectly. Science is fascinating.

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  14. A chilling glance of extinction. Well done, Rommy!

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  15. A darkish mix of ekphrastic and atmospheric poem. Brilliant write!

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