as brittle as shards of sugar glass
(twice as cloying,
masking none of the bitter)
that left me
with inflamed doubts
trying to spread to every cell,
until I am more doubt than woman.
I cannot survive under the glare
of this illusion of light
and its false promises,
so I take my doubts
into the loving darkness
where true starlight's touch
waits for me
to breathe,
to release,
to heal,
every last taint
of doubt.
Photo by Greg Rakozy on Unsplash |
This poem was created for Poets and Storyteller United's Weekly Scribblings prompt, When All Else Fails.
"true starlight's touch" -- what a gorgeous and evocative image! I love it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Debra
DeleteThe bright we find in the dark (especially in our own dark) is the most powerful of them all, for it's feed by our own spirit--few things are as strong as a spirit searching for balance. And I agree with Debra that is a stunning bit of imagery. It blooms all sorts of delight.
ReplyDeleteThat bright has been my saving grace so many times.
DeleteThis is one of the most beautiful, beautiful poems I have ever read, Rommy!❤️ I love the use of language and the emotions that it conveys to the reader especially; "I take my doubts into the loving darkness where true starlight's touch waits for me."❤️
ReplyDeleteThank you Sanaa
Delete~~~ “as brittle as shards of sugar glass twice as cloying, masking none” ~~~ cloying is one of the most impactful words I know. Love how you used it in your poem. Stellar.
ReplyDeleteIt's pretty perfect for getting across the feeling I wanted.
DeleteI've been there, feeling "more doubt than woman." The second line is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Jenna
DeleteWhata beautiful poem this is to read Rommy.
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it
DeleteAh yes, I have encountered both false light and the nurturing nature if the best kind of darkness.
ReplyDeleteIt's really something when you can feel the difference between the two. The first will never satisfy and nothing can replace the latter.
DeleteThat is my favourite version of Peter Gabriel's In Your Eyes! The symphonic sounds pair so nicely with the idea of looking up and seeing the stars. Suddenly everything feels so much smaller, troubles, worries, even myself. When found beneath the expanse of space and sound.
ReplyDeleteI was blown away the first time I heard it. And yes, I chose it exactly for that reason. The way it flows from slow and melancholy to thrilling is exactly what I wanted to get across.
DeleteBeautiful ♥
ReplyDeleteThanks Ladan
Delete"so I take my doubts into the loving darkness where true starlight's touch
ReplyDeletewaits for me" ... I so love that line. I've often found my comfort and peace beneath the moon and stars, rested my spirit in the cradle of darkness.
Me too :)
DeleteI don't like the dark, growing up I was afraid of the dark. I'd rather sit in the true sun and let it bleach or burn some "disillusion" away.
ReplyDelete..
Make sure you have enough sunscreen with a high enough SPF!
DeleteI like the shape of this poem, Rommy, the way it expands and contracts, and the doubt dwindles. It’s painful to be ‘more doubt than woman’. Thank goodness for ‘true starlight's touch’. Thank you for the blast of Peter Gabriel.
ReplyDeleteThanks for noticing that! I did want to play a bit with that aspect to reinforce the words.
DeleteRe-reading, I notice anew the loveliness of your words – and realise I didn't mention that in my previous comment, which was more focused on what they are saying.
ReplyDeleteI shall take any and all compliments about my writing :D
Delete"so I take my doubts
ReplyDeleteinto the loving darkness
where true starlight's touch
waits for me"
Such beautiful writing, Rommy! I also liked the way the lines began to pare down to the end.
Thanks!
Deletemore doubt than woman... perfectly describes what we feel sometimes! Maybe then the darkness stars becoming clearer than light.
ReplyDeleteLOL, I had an inkling I couldn't be the only one who felt that way sometimes.
DeleteWe always feel safe and loved in others company. How we miss it when we are parted.
ReplyDeleteThis is true
DeleteOh! darkness seems so soothing here!
ReplyDeleteThen I did my job well here!
DeleteI feel that way about the moon's light as opposed to the glare of the sun.
ReplyDeleteI definitely appreciate both (and getting out in the sun after being cooped up inside feels delicious) but sometimes only moonlight will do for me.
Delete"until I am more doubt than woman" - why does doubt grow within those of us sometimes. Overwhelming at times but I like how deal with it - letting the light replace and conquer the doubt.
ReplyDeleteWe all come across doubt and deal with it in our own ways
DeleteThank heaven for the "starlight touch in loving darkness". Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteHere, here!
DeleteMay be ever find our true star-light to guide us
ReplyDeleteHappy Sunday Rommy
Much💖love
I'll raise a cuppa to that!
DeleteReally gorgeous writing! I have poem envy!
ReplyDeleteAw! Thank you!
Deletethere is beauty in darkness as well. great write!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeletePowerful and beautiful poem, Rommy. Thanks for sharing. I am glad I found your blog.
ReplyDeleteCheers
Jenny
https://www.jennyenochsson.se/
You are so sweet! Thank you for visiting. <3
DeleteBeautifully expressed!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteFelt like I fell through this until the starlight caught me--loved this.
ReplyDeleteI am quite pleased by that description!
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