Precious Gem

She spread them out in front of him so he could see. One by one, she explained each’s story.

“This last,” she said, holding a stone so red it was almost black, “appeared when I made a home for the darkness.” She blinked, looking away from him.

“Beautiful,” he responded, placing his hand over hers.


This bit of flash fiction was created for Verse Escape's Friday 55

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  1. There is a skillful ambiguity at play here--not just about the characters, or the magic or the stones, but about which emotion is being displayed, about the nature of darkness itself, about compassion, self-knowledge and love...flash fiction is in my opinion the very hardest thing to write--you do a master's job with it here, Rommy. I'm so glad you joined us.

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    1. I am seriously honored by your words. I feel like there are so many ways I could go with this if I wanted to build on it, but for right now I'm delighted I got down what I wanted to say in the word limit.

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  2. I have to agree with Joy, you have written a complete story arc in 55 words. Well done indeed. If I could I would swallow that stone so red it is nearly black and take a trip to all the worlds dungeons of foul to crush them in their own darkness.

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    1. I am so pleased that my short fiction made such an impact.

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  3. I have to echo what has been said about how well you've used ambiguity on this story. The fact that we don't know a thing about any of the stones, or what she will do with them, opens a universe of possibility. And if we start wondering about what she'll do with them, that universe grows and grows and grows...

    This is you, my Rommy.

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    1. Yeah, there are a lot of ways I can go with this. I think I'll let it percolate a bit and see what I want to do with it before going on.

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  4. I, too, enjoy the ambiguity! i can see that this could blossom into something larger, as well! She made a home for the darkness...brave or desperate?

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    1. That is an excellent question Sharon. I think I have an idea of which it may be, but I'll know more when I write. :D

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  5. This leaves me to imagine what and why of the stones. I love the idea for finding a home for your darkness.

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    1. When I created the story, there were certain ideas that suggested themselves to me, but I will need to play with it more to really draw the potential of those gems out.

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  6. Ah, we both wrote about darkness and light. This makes me think of the Jungian light/dark personality stuff, but really there are so many directions one can take this.

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    1. A Jungian interpretation might not be too far off, but I'm still playing with ideas.

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  7. I gave my wive a ruby engagement ring. Darkness was transformed to light when I told her it was my heart.

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    1. That is a lovely story. <3 Thank you for sharing it.

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