I see her there
On pious knee
She is good
She is meek
She never thought enough to seek
truth
that made her heart race madly
She prefers order to impulse
Perfection over passion
She cannot comprehend
there is more than this
kneeling
and waiting
The wonder she denies
for one perfectly mad moment
Song Choice: Only the Good Die Young by Billy Joel
This poem was created from a prompt offered by Magaly Guerrero for NaPoWriMo (Day 16: Out of this world - the speaker travels to a remote parallel universe)
This poem was created from a prompt offered by Magaly Guerrero for NaPoWriMo (Day 16: Out of this world - the speaker travels to a remote parallel universe)
Parallel universe indeed!
ReplyDeleteThose can be pretty freaky places
DeleteLove the song and your poem, and you couldn't find a more alien parallel universe for my tastes!
ReplyDeleteThis is probably the most straightforward poem I've done for NaPoWriMo, but I figure if normally I'm surrounded by whimsy, enthusiasm, and decidedly unique folks what would be the alien counterpart of that? :D
DeleteGood description of your pious lady. The overly pious are always the ones who have the biggest freak-outs. I've seen something like this happen too, "the mad moment". The more parents oppress kids and teens, the bigger and more spectacular the later freak-out is, with drugs, promiscuity, beer pong, beer funnels, unfortunate hair color choices, doing dumb things at frat parties, etc. etc.
ReplyDeleteEven in that parallel place, there had to be a big earth shattering kaboom, to quote Marvin Martian. There's always a kaboom, no matter how tightly you try to control things to be otherwise. And as you say, sometimes that tight control makes for bigger explosions.
DeleteWe weirdlings are good at waiting :D XXX
ReplyDeleteStrangeness does cultivate its own particular brand of patience, doesn't it? :D
DeleteFirst off, I love that you quote Marvin the Martian. He is right, there is always a kaboom. I like the line "she never thought enough to seek truth that made her heart race madly". There must have been great peace in that...for awhile. Tight and powerful! It was a great read!
ReplyDeleteSome people will accept stagnation in return for a semblance of peace and that's a very sad thing. Thank goodness for those of us that know better. ;)
DeleteThe parallel worlds that exist within our thinking boxes are often the most complex ones. We can look at the million and who knows how many more Doctor Who's earths, but the beings that we can see only by inverting our eye... those are intimate enough to keep us wanting to pull them out of their world... and shaking them a little.
ReplyDeleteGreat language.
A little shaking up is always a good thing :)
DeleteYes.
DeleteBeautiful Rommy.
ReplyDeleteSome people wait in quiet anticipation until they are unable to move at all.
I think you put it rather poetically yourself Lorelei!
DeleteI love your words Rommy!
ReplyDeleteAw thanks! :)
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