Parallel


I see her there
On pious knee
She is good
She is meek
She never thought enough to seek
truth
that made her heart race madly

She prefers order to impulse
Perfection over passion
She cannot comprehend
there is more than this
kneeling
and waiting

The wonder she denies
will wait too
for one perfectly mad moment


Song Choice: Only the Good Die Young by Billy Joel
This poem was created from a prompt offered by Magaly Guerrero for NaPoWriMo (Day 16: Out of this world - the speaker travels to a remote parallel universe)

17 comments:

  1. Replies
    1. Those can be pretty freaky places

      Delete
  2. Love the song and your poem, and you couldn't find a more alien parallel universe for my tastes!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. This is probably the most straightforward poem I've done for NaPoWriMo, but I figure if normally I'm surrounded by whimsy, enthusiasm, and decidedly unique folks what would be the alien counterpart of that? :D

      Delete
  3. Good description of your pious lady. The overly pious are always the ones who have the biggest freak-outs. I've seen something like this happen too, "the mad moment". The more parents oppress kids and teens, the bigger and more spectacular the later freak-out is, with drugs, promiscuity, beer pong, beer funnels, unfortunate hair color choices, doing dumb things at frat parties, etc. etc.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Even in that parallel place, there had to be a big earth shattering kaboom, to quote Marvin Martian. There's always a kaboom, no matter how tightly you try to control things to be otherwise. And as you say, sometimes that tight control makes for bigger explosions.

      Delete
  4. We weirdlings are good at waiting :D XXX

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Strangeness does cultivate its own particular brand of patience, doesn't it? :D

      Delete
  5. First off, I love that you quote Marvin the Martian. He is right, there is always a kaboom. I like the line "she never thought enough to seek truth that made her heart race madly". There must have been great peace in that...for awhile. Tight and powerful! It was a great read!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Some people will accept stagnation in return for a semblance of peace and that's a very sad thing. Thank goodness for those of us that know better. ;)

      Delete
  6. The parallel worlds that exist within our thinking boxes are often the most complex ones. We can look at the million and who knows how many more Doctor Who's earths, but the beings that we can see only by inverting our eye... those are intimate enough to keep us wanting to pull them out of their world... and shaking them a little.

    Great language.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Beautiful Rommy.
    Some people wait in quiet anticipation until they are unable to move at all.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I think you put it rather poetically yourself Lorelei!

      Delete